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Chapter 1
Mark Oldman – famous, priced exorcist
and psychoanalyst who lived in New York. This unmarried middle-age man had been studying humans psychical sphere for ten years. Mr Oldman had publicated twenty articles about people's mind.
Many magazines wanted to make interview with him, but he was withdrawn into himself and very eccentric. But he was partial to beautiful women, so he agreed carrying only one interview to local newspeaper – of course with shapely journalist. Mr. Oldman had supernatural abilities – during conversation he can have got to know everything, even secrets about his interlocutor. When Sarah has come, he said: 'You're Sarah of twenty five, aren't you? Generaly, interviews are wastes of time... I 've prepared answers for your questions” Journalist was very astonished. She wanted to go away, because she was affraid of him. He said:' Don't be scared. I'm not a ghost or vamp. So, can we start the conversation? I haven't to much time.' 'You have been studying human's soul and psychological mechanizm for six years. Why now are you interested in ghosts? Do You belive in them?” asked Sarah. „hmm.. If I had not belie\be in ghost, I would be not interested in them. I think, this invisible figures are substiting all around us. They're living in our gardens, houses, cars. Do you know why cars accidents happen?' „Why?'- asked Sarah in disabelief. 'Because... Guess why!”
Young journalist became very frustrated. Interview was really difficult, because Mr. Oldman had hard character. In Mark's house were old-fashion furnitures, full of books shelfs and bizarre paintings. Saraj has never earlier seen such a stragne place and she regarded Mr. Oldman as a freak.
When they were keeping the ball rolling, suddenly, somebody started knocking on the door loudly and impatiently. Mr. Oldman didn't know what was going on. A few seconds later a man ran into dinning room. 'Mr. Oldman. You must help me! I don't know what should I do... My wife and daughter ale kneeling under painting. Emily, my child, keep knive in her hand... I... I don't know. Help me!' - shouted dsperated man. Sarah became scared. Fortunatley, psychoanalyst kept his head. 'Mathew, stop ssouted, calm down!' - Mr. Oldman tried reassure nervous man, who all time was shaking with fear and can't hane controled himself.
In a moment everybody run into next-door house. Hanging evening incerased menace. Young journalist, alike excited and scared, hang on to professor's arm. When Mr. Oldman crossed a doorstep, in home everything seemed to be unlike than usual, shouted: 'Oh Jesus...!' He couldn't belive owns eyes... Everywhere was full of blood. Close by chair, was stabbed in inscrutable, ritual ceremonial cat's fur. Small Emily had drunk owns plush bear. But she gave him animal's blood. Her mother, in kneeling under painting, waved her hands. Mark Oldman ascertained, that he had never seen such an occurrence.
Next day, local newspeaper publicated short article about”hypnosed family”. Mark had decided to unriddle it.
Chapter 2
In the next few days Brown's lived safely. Suddanley, Mark Oldman had heart noisy crash... Emily threw through the window chais, table and glass bottles. Mark without thinking ran to the neighbours. On a door he saw picture. But it wasn't typical childish ilustration – presenteg blooded eye. When he went in, he frightened, On the walls were Emily's drawings, which presented only scared situations – satans, spooks and just bloated eyes.
This day Mathew's wife – Ann seemed to be normal. She Had invited him and proposed coffe. They were talking ang laughing. But Mark Had noticed something disquieting – mother wasn't intrested in her child's behaviour at all. 'Where is Emily' – asked Mark. 'My daughter knows her mind. Don't worry. She's interpreting omens,, which THEY have send her” - said Ann and she came out to the kitchen very fast'
'With my wife happens something wrong...' - whispered Mathew – 'She doesn't let me play with daughter, at home all timie she's lighting candles. I don't know. Can it be beginning of psychic disease?” Psychoanalyst looked at desperated neighbour distrastfully and followed to the door. He had stopped for a moment in a hall. Painting, under which Ann and Emily were kneeling, attraced his attention. 'Mathew, when did you buy this painting?”- asked professor nervously. 'We moved in here two months ago. This picture Had just hung in this home. I remember Emily liked it very much, so she wanted have it in her room. ' - answered Mathew. Mark Oldman went out without saying anything.
When he had come back home, he has made a phone-call to Sarah. He asked her for gaining more informationes about previous Mathew's home owners and for arriving to him.
Twenty minutes later Sarah turned up. 'So, I have found an article about Brown's house. Many years ago a man killed there his wife and childreen, but it's no important. I've found a mention of painting, which present old family. What's more – this paint hypnose anyone, who looks at it... People – only women – become very agressive and can even kill animals' – said Sarah.'woman in libarty told me, that painting was misterious. We have to take this picture.' 'It won't be easy.. ' -said Mark. 'Why?' - asked sarah. 'Intresting... That clever but doesn't know' – answered professor vainly. 'No wonder you haven't wife. Who would bear with you.. ohh... you're sarcastic eccentric!' - said Sarah. 'This is not the right time to quarrel. We'll talk about it over coffe later. So. Let's go to the libarty. Maybe we will het to know something more.
Chapter 3
„Sorry, I can't help you. Don't ask me why... Do you see this man? He's John Cruise – property office's owner. By hand of his agency, Browns bought home. He'll tell you more.” Mark Oldman and Sarah thanked her for informations. They without thinking came up to Mr. Cruise. 'Good morning. I'm Mark Oldman. Could you tell me anything about house 65 Avillen Street?' - asked Mark. A man became upset, reddened and said: „Painting.
Chapter 1
Mark Oldman – famous, priced exorcist
and psychoanalyst who lived in New York. This unmarried middle-age man had been studying humans psychical sphere for ten years. Mr Oldman had publicated twenty articles about people's mind.
Many magazines wanted to make interview with him, but he was withdrawn into himself and very eccentric. But he was partial to beautiful women, so he agreed carrying only one interview to local newspeaper – of course with shapely journalist. Mr. Oldman had supernatural abilities – during conversation he can have got to know everything, even secrets about his interlocutor. When Sarah has come, he said: 'You're Sarah of twenty five, aren't you? Generaly, interviews are wastes of time... I 've prepared answers for your questions” Journalist was very astonished. She wanted to go away, because she was affraid of him. He said:' Don't be scared. I'm not a ghost or vamp. So, can we start the conversation? I haven't to much time.' 'You have been studying human's soul and psychological mechanizm for six years. Why now are you interested in ghosts? Do You belive in them?” asked Sarah. „hmm.. If I had not belie\be in ghost, I would be not interested in them. I think, this invisible figures are substiting all around us. They're living in our gardens, houses, cars. Do you know why cars accidents happen?' „Why?'- asked Sarah in disabelief. 'Because... Guess why!”
Young journalist became very frustrated. Interview was really difficult, because Mr. Oldman had hard character. In Mark's house were old-fashion furnitures, full of books shelfs and bizarre paintings. Saraj has never earlier seen such a stragne place and she regarded Mr. Oldman as a freak.
When they were keeping the ball rolling, suddenly, somebody started knocking on the door loudly and impatiently. Mr. Oldman didn't know what was going on. A few seconds later a man ran into dinning room. 'Mr. Oldman. You must help me! I don't know what should I do... My wife and daughter ale kneeling under painting. Emily, my child, keep knive in her hand... I... I don't know. Help me!' - shouted dsperated man. Sarah became scared. Fortunatley, psychoanalyst kept his head. 'Mathew, stop ssouted, calm down!' - Mr. Oldman tried reassure nervous man, who all time was shaking with fear and can't hane controled himself.
In a moment everybody run into next-door house. Hanging evening incerased menace. Young journalist, alike excited and scared, hang on to professor's arm. When Mr. Oldman crossed a doorstep, in home everything seemed to be unlike than usual, shouted: 'Oh Jesus...!' He couldn't belive owns eyes... Everywhere was full of blood. Close by chair, was stabbed in inscrutable, ritual ceremonial cat's fur. Small Emily had drunk owns plush bear. But she gave him animal's blood. Her mother, in kneeling under painting, waved her hands. Mark Oldman ascertained, that he had never seen such an occurrence.
Next day, local newspeaper publicated short article about”hypnosed family”. Mark had decided to unriddle it.
Chapter 2
In the next few days Brown's lived safely. Suddanley, Mark Oldman had heart noisy crash... Emily threw through the window chais, table and glass bottles. Mark without thinking ran to the neighbours. On a door he saw picture. But it wasn't typical childish ilustration – presenteg blooded eye. When he went in, he frightened, On the walls were Emily's drawings, which presented only scared situations – satans, spooks and just bloated eyes.
This day Mathew's wife – Ann seemed to be normal. She Had invited him and proposed coffe. They were talking ang laughing. But Mark Had noticed something disquieting – mother wasn't intrested in her child's behaviour at all. 'Where is Emily' – asked Mark. 'My daughter knows her mind. Don't worry. She's interpreting omens,, which THEY have send her” - said Ann and she came out to the kitchen very fast'
'With my wife happens something wrong...' - whispered Mathew – 'She doesn't let me play with daughter, at home all timie she's lighting candles. I don't know. Can it be beginning of psychic disease?” Psychoanalyst looked at desperated neighbour distrastfully and followed to the door. He had stopped for a moment in a hall. Painting, under which Ann and Emily were kneeling, attraced his attention. 'Mathew, when did you buy this painting?”- asked professor nervously. 'We moved in here two months ago. This picture Had just hung in this home. I remember Emily liked it very much, so she wanted have it in her room. ' - answered Mathew. Mark Oldman went out without saying anything.
When he had come back home, he has made a phone-call to Sarah. He asked her for gaining more informationes about previous Mathew's home owners and for arriving to him.
Twenty minutes later Sarah turned up. 'So, I have found an article about Brown's house. Many years ago a man killed there his wife and childreen, but it's no important. I've found a mention of painting, which present old family. What's more – this paint hypnose anyone, who looks at it... People – only women – become very agressive and can even kill animals' – said Sarah.'woman in libarty told me, that painting was misterious. We have to take this picture.' 'It won't be easy.. ' -said Mark. 'Why?' - asked sarah. 'Intresting... That clever but doesn't know' – answered professor vainly. 'No wonder you haven't wife. Who would bear with you.. ohh... you're sarcastic eccentric!' - said Sarah. 'This is not the right time to quarrel. We'll talk about it over coffe later. So. Let's go to the libarty. Maybe we will het to know something more.
Chapter 3
„Sorry, I can't help you. Don't ask me why... Do you see this man? He's John Cruise – property office's owner. By hand of his agency, Browns bought home. He'll tell you more.” Mark Oldman and Sarah thanked her for informations. They without thinking came up to Mr. Cruise. 'Good morning. I'm Mark Oldman. Could you tell me anything about house 65 Avillen Street?' - asked Mark. A man became upset, reddened and said: „Painting.