proszę o sprawdzenie mojego OPOWIADANKA

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Re: proszę o sprawdzenie mojego OPOWIADANKA

Postautor: Matka Chrzestna » 18 paź 2006, 21:36

Witam :)
Proszę o sprawdzenie i poprawienie błędów :) oraz o uwagi i komentarze ;)

I was alone in the house reading. I didn’t want to do this but it was one of my obligatory readings so I have to. After a few minutes I heard a doorbell. There were two of my classmates – Sean and Marry. My parents had forbidden me open the door when I was alone even for my best friends. This time I didn’t take my parent’s advice and I would have regretted my behavior.

- Hi Ann! What are you doing? Come with us to ride on bicycles! – Said Sean.
- Oh, I would like to, but I’m alone in the house and…
- So maybe we play in boarding games or cards at your house? - They knew my weak point. I was addicted from playing Monopoly, poker and other games.
- Ok! Come on! Take off your shoes and make yourself comfortable.

Firstly, we were playing different games. After that, we were starving so we went to the kitchen and made a huge plate of cheese and ham sandwiches. We were eating and drinking tea while we were watching cartoons.

I would have never expected what could happen next. We thought that we would be changing our clothes. My mother had well appointed wardrobe so we put her clothes on and were taking ourselves photos. It was a great fun. Then we started do a make up. Sean wanted to have a read nails. Unfortunately opened nail enamel somehow fall down. A big red stain appeared on a green carped. We tried to clear it, but we only made it bigger and bigger.

When my parents saw it, they were very angry. As a punishment I had to doing house works for a month and my parents had to buy a new carped of course.

dzięki za pomoc :)
pozdrawiam ;)
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Re: proszę o sprawdzenie mojego OPOWIADANKA

Postautor: illi » 19 paź 2006, 8:59

I was alone in the house reading. I didn’t want to do this but it was one of my obligatory readings so I had to. After a few minutes I heard a doorbell. There were two of my classmates – Sean and Marry. My parents had forbidden me to open the door when I was alone even for my best friends. This time I didn’t take my parent’s advice and I would regret my behavior.

- Hi Ann! What are you doing? Come with us to ride a bike! – Said Sean.
- Oh, I would like to, but I’m alone in the house and…
- So maybe we play board games or cards at your house? - They knew my weak point. I was addicted to playing Monopoly, poker and other games.
- Ok! Come on! Take off your shoes and make yourselves comfortable.

Firstly, we were playing different games. After that, we were starving so we went to the kitchen and made a huge plate of cheese and ham sandwiches. We were eating and drinking tea while we were watching cartoons.

I would have never expected what could happen next. We thought that we would change our clothes. My mother had a well-appointed wardrobe so we put her clothes on and were taking photos of ourselves. It was great fun. Then we started doing a make up. Sean wanted to have red nails. Unfortunately when I opened the nail enamel it fell down somehow. A big red stain appeared on a green carpet. We tried to clean it but we only made it bigger and bigger.

When my parents saw it, they were very angry. As a punishment I had to do housework for a month and my parents had to buy a new carpet of course.


generalnie, nie tak duzo tych bledow, troche przyimkow, troche form czasownikow.
pozdrawiam
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Re: proszę o sprawdzenie mojego OPOWIADANKA

Postautor: illi » 19 paź 2006, 9:00

hehe, zegarek na forum zle chodzi. przy moim poscie jest prawie 10:00 a tak naprawde jest 9:10
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Re: proszę o sprawdzenie mojego OPOWIADANKA

Postautor: Matka Chrzestna » 19 paź 2006, 15:09

nie zdąż…yłam nanieść poprawek przed oddanie pracy nauczycielce, ale sprawdzam sobie teraz :) no i widzę... :)

moja mauczycielka powiedziała ż…e nie podaoba jej sie kilka rzeczy, a najbardziej nie mogła zrozumieć zdania:
We thought that we would change our clothes.
podkreśliła ż…e źle, ale nie dała swojej propozycji jak poprawić :/

powiedziała ze słaba praca, a ja tak się starałam...

OK dzięki za pomoc ;)
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Re: proszę o sprawdzenie mojego OPOWIADANKA

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