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[Visitor]

Z góry dziękuję za wszelkie uwagi - to mój Cover Letter, moż…e wreszcie znajdę pracę

Dear Mr. XXXX,

I have solid experience in international advertising agency on the position of Art Director. I learned about your need and I would like to apply for this position with XXXX.

I’m Senior Art Director with hands-on creative background. In XXXX I was responsible for agency’s key clients: Kraft Food Polska, AmRest, Ford, BP, GlaxoSmithKline. Working on such brands as KFC, Pizza Hut, Maxwell House, 3Bit or Indesit. Beside creating advertising campaigns, I also took part in preparing a strategy and execution supervision. I have practice in numerous TVC productions and basic experience in directing. I had an opportunity to create complex consumer promotions and other BTL activities. I’m a self-motivated and conscientious person, able to work in a fast paced environment. My enclosed resume provides additional details about my background.

I am eager to self-develop and I believe I could make a valuable contribution to XXXX. I would welcome the opportunity to interview with you and demonstrate my portfolio. Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,
XXXX

[colibri]

Mam nadzieje ze ci to pomoze.


I have a solid experience in an international advertising agency as an Art Director.

It has come to my attention that you have an opening for a simmilar role and I would like to apply for it with/through XXX.


?? jestes tam jeszcze zatrudniona jezeli tak to mozesz pisac "I am" ale jesli juz tam nie pracujesz to napisz, "In my last role I worked as a Senior Director..."

I am currently a Senior Art Director (dobrze by bylo wstawic imie firmy dla ktorej pracujesz np. at Marketing Stunts) with a hands-on creative background. In XXXX I was/am? responsible for agencies'(to nie jest pomylka agencies' jest poprawnie) key clients: Kraft Food Polska, AmRest, Ford, BP, GlaxoSmithKline. Working with brands such as; KFC, Pizza Hut, Maxwell House, 3Bit or Indesit.

Besides creating advertising campaigns, I also took part in preparing a strategy, execution and supervision projects/assigments.
I have participated in albo I was in charge of numerous TVC productions and have a basic experience in directing/project management.I also had an opportunity to create a number of complex consumer promotion and other BTL activities.

I’m a self-motivated and conscientious person, able to work in a fast paced environment. An enclosed resume provides additional details about my background.

I am eager to learn and further develop my knowledge and experience in the marketing field and I believe that I could make a valuable contribution to your company.
I would welcome the opportunity to be interview by you and to demonstrate my portfolio.
Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,
XXXX

[colibri]

Aha! to pierwsze zdanie mozesz skonczyc na "I would like to apply for it."

pisz dalej tylko jezeli starasz sie o ta prace przez jakiegos posrednika, ale jezeli to jest prosto do firmy do ktorej wysylasz swoj resume/cv to daj kropke za it. tak jak tu napisalam.

[colibri]

Oh, jeszcze jedno wlasnie zauwazylam ze "promotion" brakuje "s" powinno byc "promotions"
przepraszam za szybko pisalam.

Sylwia

[Visitor]

Bardzo dziękuję za pomoc. Pisałem to samodzielnie i wszelkie uwagi były dla mnie bardzo cenne.

Niestety obecnie na stałe nie pracuję a moja ostatnia praca nie nadaje się do CL, więc chyba tak napiszę: I am currently a Freelance Senior Art Director with a hands-on creative background. In XXXX I was responsible for agencies' key clients: ... Że pisze się agencies' to bym się nie domyślił.

I have participated in numerous TVC productions and have a basic experience in directing. Chodziło mi o to, ż…e mam doświadczenie zdobyte przy licznych produkcjach reklam TV i prostych pracach reż…yserskich, więc tak chyba będzie OK.

Mam rozterki, co do rozwijania zwrotu to self-develop, to chyba taki typowy zwrot określający oczekiwania wobec pracownika?

Stokrotne dzięki,
Mariusz

[Krzysztof B]

Dobre rady tu dała Sylwia.

Żeby jeszcze trochę udoskonalić ten CL, powinno być "I have solid experience" i “have basic experience” zamiast "a solid/basic experience."*

Simmilar to jest similar.

“freelance senior art director” czy “art director” nie potrzebuje większych liter.

agencies’ to jest poprawnie, bo to liczba mnoga. Jeśli chodzi o jeden agency, to trzeba dać agency’s. Powinno też… być też… jakieś słowo przed agencies’, np. “for several agencies’ key clients” albo “for my agency’s key clients.”
Ale czym się roż…nią firmy w tamtym zdaniu od tych następnym zdaniu?

“preparing a strategy and execution supervision” – mi się wydaje, ż…e masz na myśli “preparing a srategy and supervising its execution.”

“to be interviewed by you”

Self-develop to się właściwie nie uż…ywa. Dobrze brzmią zdania napisane przez Sylwię.

Powodzenia z pracą!


*experience = doświadczenie ogólne/wielokrotne
an experience = doświadczenie pewnego razu

[Visitor]

agency’s - tak, chodziło o konkretną, jedną agencję

Te pierwsze wymienione to firmy, z którymi współpracowała moja agencja np. Kraft, a te drugie to produkty (marki) dla których robiliśmy reklamy np. Maxwell House, a Jacobsa - też… do Krafta robiła już… inna agencja

Dzięki!

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