błagam o sprawdzenie błędów - PILNE! :(

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napisałem rozprawkę na angielski na temat: GOOD & BAD FEATURES OF TODAYS SCHOOL. troszeczkę się nad nią pomęczyłem, lecz nie mam już… sił, aby sprawdzić te wszystkie błędy gramatyczne, których jest tutaj duż…o.. błagam kogoś o sprawdzenie błędów i jeż…eli trzeba zamienić jakieś słowo/zdanie na inne.

We found good and bad features in all areas of education. Everyone of us wonder, is there perfect school. I want to find answer for this questions in my for and against composition.
We must check our abilities. Polish educational system give this possibility. In the end of primary, high and grammar school, we have an egsams. It's very good idea, because we can chceck what we were learned and it's good way for fairly enrolment.
Next good feature is a fact, that we can feel more safe in school than previously. Now in schools, we have a lot of safety measures like bodyguard or camera. It's a big plus.
Also, the advantage of todays school is division for three dutiful stages. First is begin of study, second is revision of six years and introduce for next stage and third is preparation to studies.
Polish schools assure us, that in Poland we have a good teachers. It's not true, because a big part of students have a private lessons. This fact is a big minus.
In the school it's a subject called: physical education. In my opinion, it's not good, that PE is dutiful. A lot of students think that judge our physical abilities is a very bad thing.
Next bad feautre is a fact, that students have too many lessons. We don't have time to learn, doing homeworks and other duties.
In my opinion, the perfect school doesen't exist. My perfect school must be professional and exacting, but only when we've been in school. Then we have more free time.
Everyone has an others requirements. But who knows.. Maybe someday the perfect school come into existance?

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Everyone wondres if there is a perfect school.
What is more, we can feel more safe in the school than in the past. (Next good feature is a fact to polonizm, anglik by tak nie powoedział) Nowadays in schools, we have a lot of safetymeasures like bodyguard and cameras.
zamiast a big part of students powinno być a majority of students...

Pomysl nad akapitem o PE nie brzmi zbyt profesjonalnie

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Z grubsza się temu przyjrzałam, poprawiłam błędy, w paru miejscach zmieniłam słowa. Np. dutiful to obowiązkowy w sensie pracowity, skrupulatny. Obowiązkowe lekcje to obligatory lessons. Radziłabym wyrzucić akapit o wychowaniu fizycznym - przecież… tu nie chodzi o ocenę sprawności, tylko o jej rozwijanie. Nauczycieli to moż…e zirytować. ;-)
Swoją drogę, w której jesteś klasie? Jeż…eli w gimnazjum, to myślę, ż…e rozprawka zasłuż…yła na solidną czwórkę. Jeśli w liceum... ojej. Cienko.
Przepraszam za krytykę, nie chodziło mi o wbicie Cię w glebę. ;-)

We find good and bad features in all aspects of education. Everyone wonders, if a perfect school exists. I would like to find the answer for this question in my for and against composition.
Let's consider Polish school. We must check our abilities. Polish educational system gives us this possibility. In the end of primary, high and grammar school, we pass exams. I think it's a very good idea, because this way we can check what we've learned. Also, it enables a fair play in the enrollment.
Next good aspect is that nowadays we can feel safe at school. There's a lot of safety measures undertaken, such as bodyguards or camera network.
One of the contemporary school advantages is its division into three educational stages.The first is the beginning of study, the second is some kind of revision of six years and introduction for next stage, which is preparation to the university.
Polish schools assures us, that in Poland we have competent teachers. In my opinion it's not true, because a big part of students have a private lessons.
In the school there's a subject called physical education. I think that it should not be obligatory. Many students think that assessing their physical abilitiesis not fair.
Next bad feature is an excess of lessons. There's simply too many of them. We don't have time to learn, doing homeworks and other duties.
In my opinion, the perfect school doesn't exist. My perfect school should be professional and exacting, but only when we're in school. Later we should have more free time.
Everyone has different requirements. But who knows... Maybe someday the perfect school will come into existence?

[Visitor]

Pomyliłam się. Oczywiście powinno być: "Polish schools assure us..."

Pozdrowienia,
Endi.

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