Opowiadanie (pilne!)

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Opowiadanie (pilne!)

Postautor: VVHotel » 28 mar 2012, 12:06

"Napisz opowiadanie zaczynające się od słów: When I woke up, I couldn't believe my eyes"
Wiem, ż…e trochę to naciągnęłam, ale nie mogłam wymyślić nic innego, a nie chciałam pisać o Bradzie Pitcie stojącym w drzwiach ;] Pewnie narobiłam tu masę błędów i pokręciłam czasy, więc bardzo proszę o poprawienie :) Muszę to oddać do piątku.


When I woke up in the morning, I couldn’t believe my eyes. Although, it would be better to say: ears...
There was nothing unusual in my room: bed, plants on the windowsill, birds perching in the trees behind the window... That’s it! Shouldn’t they sing? I got up and opened the window. Still silently. I take a look on my phone. 7:15! Mum should be preparing to work – so why can’t I hear nothing? The whole apartment was submerged in silence. I made up my mind to go to the kitchen. En route, I peered to mum’s room. It was empty, so I went along. When I came in the door, mum started chatting. I have seen her, but I couldn’t recognise the speech. I didn’t know what happened! I returned to my room to take a sheet. I wrote „I didn’t hear anything” on it. Thereafter I gave it to mum. When she have red my note, she was all fired up, I suppose, that she bid me stop pulling her leg. Presently, our neighbour drilled in the wall. Mum grimaced immediately, but I was still quiet. She didn’t believe me till then. We went to the hospital - but the audiologist left us no doubt about my deafness – I’ll never retrieve hearing. Me, who highly loved listening to music... Me, who couldn’t figure changing school, leaving friends... Now, I will have to. My life turned 180 degrees. It’ll be the biggest challenge in my life... But I’ll manage.
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Postautor: Bgirl » 02 kwie 2012, 17:01

Pewnie się spóźniłam z tą poprawą twojego opowiadania ;-) ale moż…e się komuś przyda! Miałam chwilę czasu wiec troszkę dodałam, troche zmienilam i wyszło co widac .... pozdrawiam ....



"When I woke up in the morning, I couldn’t believe my eyes. Although, it would be better to say: I couldn’t believe my ears ... .
The morning wasn’t different from the previous and there was nothing unusual in my room : bed, plants on the windowsill, birds perching in the trees behind the window. Everything looked so natural, so every day but apart from one thing - silence. I quickly jumped out of my bed and opened the window. I couldn’t hear the cars on the streets, the birds , the people walking , nothing.
I looked at my watch to check what time is it. It was 7.15 and my mum should prepare a breakfast for me and my dad I didn’t hear anything. Only silence. I quickly picked up my thoughts and went to the kitchen. The whole apartment was submerged in silence.
After two minutes I was in the kitchen and there was my mum and dad. I had a sigh of relief that I was not there alone but only for a while. My mum started to say something to me but I couldn’t hear anything. I saw her lips were moving but that was all. I didn’t know what happened! I took a piece of paper from a fridge and wrote : ‘ I can’t hear anything’ .
When my mum red my note, she was scared , surprised and confused. She couldn’t say anything for a while. Fortunately, my dad was clear-headed and we went to the hospital. I was terrified, thousands of thoughts were swirled in my head. Finally, it was my turn.
The diagnosis that the doctor had set for me was so cruel. I'll never regain my hearing.
I felt strange, like I was in another world where there is only silence.
Me, who highly loved listening to music..., who couldn’t figure changing school, leaving friends. But now I will have to. It’ll be the biggest challenge in my life. My life has turned 180 degrees.
It was five years ago and now I am 20 years old girl still trying to accept myself and my new life.
From that time I believe in a statement that “what didn’t kill me, it makes me stronger’. But it doesn’t the only one thing that gives me a lot of strength, another reason was, is and will be my family."
Once more into the fray.
Into the last good fight I'll ever know.
Live and die on this day.
Live and die on this day.
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